TheBadGuy
Foal
"I ain't no bad GUY, but I'm sure as herring one badbass chick."
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Post by TheBadGuy on Feb 3, 2013 16:09:10 GMT -7
Please note: I don't know how to write in code, sorry! Name: Envies Murder Nickname: Envy Type: Wolf Breed: Steppe Wolf Age: 4 Gender: Female Coat color: Black Eye color: Green Personality/point of view: Very battle-oriented, she tends to be rather cruel when fighting or hunting. History: Envy was born in a desert, so she had to be tough right from the start of her life. When she joined a pack of coyotes, she became a brutal and mercyless opponent. Being born with a condition known as melanism made her solid black. This sparked her midnight attacks. She found her current home after getting lost during a battle. Sample: (From character's point of view) I can see my breath in the majestic desert air. Although it's dark I can see everything before me on the empty horizon. An ancient need fills me, to draw blood from another being. To kill once again. I stand, slightly crazed by my mind's request, and walk to the first born son of our beta male. Serio, he calls him. Just a pup. I lower my head, and bare my teeth. The pup opens his eyes just as my fangs end his life...
Thanks for reading. Once again, sorry that I couldn't write in code.
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Post by Racing on Feb 5, 2013 15:09:44 GMT -7
First of all, welcome to the site, TheBadGuy!
While reviewing your bio, I noticed a few issues.
1. The nickname Envy is taken. Please choose another.
2. Your personality, while a good summary, is a bit short. A few more sentences detailing what she's like in usual day-to-day interactions, that'd be great.
3. Your history is also short, needing about 40 more words to be accepted.
4. Your sample post is, again, short. Please add about 20 more words to it.
Once these issues are fixed, we will take another look at your bio. Thank you!
- Racing
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